RADIANT: A 12-PANEL PITCH

131016_12PANEL_RadiumGirls-01.jpg.CROP.original-originalLate last June (2013), I got an email one day from the cartoonist James Sturm who runs the Center for Cartoon Studies in White River Junction, Vermont, a place I’ve visited and spoken at on two very happy occasions. “This fall,” James wrote, “CCS and Slate will be debuting a weekly feature called 12 Panel Pitch. If you’ve ever wanted to indulge in the tropes that define Hollywood filmmaking (without having to subject yourself to the humiliations of that process) perhaps you’d consider writing a 12 panel comic? You can approach the work sincerely or as a parody but readers should be able to instinctively recognize the genre of film you’re crafting, and expand on your boiled down script/story with their internalized libraries of clichés and fantasies.” Well, of course I wanted to indulge in the tropes that defined Hollywood filmmaking (without having to subject myself, again, to the humiliations of that process), so I wrote back immediately and said, Yes!

Then, in early July, while I was staying in a small cabin on Norton Island, Maine (the same cabin where I wrote at least half of It’s Superman! in the summers of 2003 and 2004), I worked up a script (the genre: “based on a true story”) called “Radiant.”  (In 2010 I spent many months researching the real-life Radium Girls from Orange, New Jersey in order to write a novel called  “Patsy Touey,” which  I’ve completed but which remains unrevised.)

To do the script, first I drew tiny panel thumbnails in one of my notebooks—drew and redrew them with stick figures, inserting empty dialog balloons and caption boxes inside the panels and jotting possible dialog and captions outside of them. Scripting comics is fiendishly demanding—it’s more an art of subtraction than addition.

After I felt my breakdowns told a coherent story, I wrote an actual script. I liked it, but was afraid, almost positive, it was too wordy. Even so, I thought I’d send it off to James and see what he thought.

My first draft follows directly below.  Beneath it, you’ll find James Sturm’s response to me about it, sent a day or two later.

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 PANEL ONE

Description: Both small hands of a teenage girl: the right holds a long-handled artist’s brush, the point shaped very fine. The left holds a round cardboard wristwatch-dial face. Only a few of the numerals (12, 1, 2) have been finically painted on the watch-dial, the rest of the dial is blank; the tip of the brush has just finished daubing on the numeral “2.” The tip of the brush and the painted-on numerals radiate twinkles. (If there’s room, and the cartoonist is so inclined, the scene might also indicate the surface of a work table and a shallow saucer of paint; the radium-laced paint in the saucer would also throw off some sparkles or scintillas.)

Caption 1: During World War I, glow-in-the-dark wristwatches were provided to American troops fighting in Europe—easier to synchronize attacks when soldiers weren’t fumbling around for pocket watches.

Caption 2: The watch dials—and eventually alarm clock dials, compass dials, and door numbers—were painted with radium-laced paint by teenage girls. Such finicky work was most profitably handled by a labor force with small, steady hands and keen eyesight.

Caption 3: Radium, of course, was perfectly safe. In 1917.

Dialog off (Agnes): Your guy still coming home for Christmas?

 

PANEL TWO

Description: The dial painting studio. Tall multi-pane window. We should see at least one long table/workbench with four teenage girls (16-20) sitting along one side of it on high stools. Two of the girls, seated on side-by-side stools, have turned to one another; they’re talking. The dark haired pretty girl is ROSE. The mousy blonde is AGNES.

Another girl is bent over a dial blank, working; the last girl in the row is touching the point of her brush to the tip of her tongue to make a fine point. The DEPT. SUPERVISOR, a stocky woman in a white lab coat, stands alongside the last girl, instructing her. A subtle twinkling glow emanates from everything, objects and people alike.

Rose: Yes—and I’m pretty sure there’s something he wants to ask me.

Supervisor (to the girl with the brush tip in her mouth): You’ll always get a nice firm point if you just…roll it…across your tongue. Very good! Excellent!

Supervisor: Rose! Mind on your work, my girl!

 

PANEL THREE

Description: Outdoors, overhead shot. An L-shaped early-20th-century 2-story brick factory building; tall many-paned windows. If it can be fitted naturally: on the roof, either completely or in partial, is a tall, braced illuminated sign: “Lux Radium Company.” Night.  A moon overhead.  Early winter scene. It’s dark, and the dial painters are all leaving work together, in clumps and in pairs, etc., exiting from a couple of doors; they’re tiny from our vantage and they’re all glowing brightly in the pitch black. Cumulatively, they light up the courtyard in front of them. This should look very odd, be unsettling, but magical too. To give the image contrast, some non-dial-painting male workers might be seen crossing the courtyard as well, completely in silhouette.

The dialog pointers can point anywhere, really, into the crowd of girls; if there are two girls walking distinctly together, the pointers could go to them.

Girl in the crowd/Agnes: Do you think he’ll want to get married before he ships off to France?

Other Girl in the crowd/Rose: Anything’s possible, Agnes—but one step at a time!

Girl in the crowd/Agnes: Oh Rosie, I’m so excited for you!

Caption: The dial painters ingested so much radium dust on the job they all began to glow in the dark themselves…

 

PANEL FOUR

Description: Rose, in her lower-middle-class bedroom at home. She’s dressed in a 1917-appropriate slip, and she’s sitting or standing at a large dresser or table mirror, applying makeup, except that she’s using a dial-painting brush and she’s drawing a line with it across the top of one eyelid. And she’s not using make-up, she’s using radium paint (there’s saucer of paint that she sneaked out of work on the dresser/table); already she’s done her lips and they’re glowing brightly. Also, her fingernails. Her hair, too, is gently sparkling/sparking.

Caption: Rose Gray, 18, wanted to look especially…alluring for her soldier-beau at the Christmas Ball, so she sneaked a little dial paint home from the factory and added it to her cosmetics. Well, this was an extra-special occasion! Besides, the company wouldn’t miss a teensy bit of phosphorescent paint—they had vats of it!

Dialog off (Rose’s Mother): Rose! Honey, Andy’s been waiting patiently for half an hour!

Rose: Coming, Ma!

 

PANEL FIVE

Description: In the narrow hallway of a small urban row house, looking up the shabby-ish stairs to Rose who is assuming a glamorous pose at the top. At the foot of the stairs, in the foreground, are ROSE’S MOTHER and ANDY. Andy is wearing a U.S. Army private’s/infantryman’s uniform, circa 1917. Maybe there’s a framed cheap sentimental picture on the wall along the staircase. But while the premises are poor-genteel, the image is Gone With the Wind dramatic: Andy and Rose’s Mother look amazed and delighted gazing open-mouthed up at Grace wearing a nice, but nothing spectacular, winter-party dress. What makes Rose look remarkable is that’s she’s beaming light like some medieval saint or glamorously backlit movie star.

Caption: And that night Rose Gray looked most alluring. She looked—radiant!

Identical Icons in balloons over the heads of both Rose’s Mother and Andy: ! (exclamation point)

 

PANEL SIX

Description: A Christmas ball, circa 1915-20; not country-club swank, more a community center type of affair. Young working-class men and women on a dance floor, seasonal decorations on the walls, perhaps a bandstand (with orchestra) indicated. The couples are surrounding Rose and Andy, giving them a wide berth. The lights have been turned off for the last dance, but Rose is glowing in Andy’s arms (they’re dancing), and the men and women standing around them are all applauding, some illuminated by Rose’s light, others in silhouette. Rose looks happy, Andy is in awe of his uncanny girlfriend.

Caption 1: Emanating her own miraculous glow, she was the sensation of the ball…

Caption 2:  When the lights were turned off for the last dance, there was a collective gasp—then ecstatic applause for Rose Gray the Radium Girl!

Caption 3: Yes, Andy proposed. And Rose accepted.

 

PANEL SEVEN

Description: A wedding photograph in an attractive era-appropriate picture frame (maybe leather) stands on a flat surface. Possibly, since we’ll see in the next panel that the picture is standing displayed on top of a bedroom dresser, there might be a woman’s hairbrush lying nearby, or a dish for pins or buttons. It’s not necessary we see them, though. The wedding picture is the focus, and it’s a studio photograph, posed: Andy, well groomed and ramrod straight in his military uniform, is smiling beside…a blur, a fuzzy blur, no facial features or bodily figure can be seen clearly, though at places we can see that the “blur” (Rose) is dressed in a lovely wedding gown with a long train. (Actual Radium Girls, like Rose in this story, often fogged up photographic film because of how radioactive they were.)

Caption 1: Andy had a short war (concussion, recovery, honorable discharge) and married Rose the following summer. She quit her job at the radium company and they moved to another city.

Caption 2: As time passed, Rose’s happy girlhood days as a watch-dial painter slowly faded to a haze in her memory…

 

PANEL EIGHT

Description: Rose’s married bedroom. She’s sitting propped up against several pillows in the iron bedstead. Beside the bed is a night table with a small lamp and a large collection of pill bottles, a water glass, a spoon. Rose’s friend from the radium company, Agnes, is sitting on a straight-back chair at bedside. The two women are engaged in an intense conversation; both of them have aged dramatically and both look haggard and ill; Agnes’ cane is on the floor alongside of her chair, or else it’s hooked over the chair back. Rose is in her nightgown and on one side of her face, her jawline is thickly bandaged. Her hair is ratty, turning gray. Both women emanate a few weak radiation lines from their heads or bodies.

The dresser or highboy where the wedding photo is displayed is fully or partly visible. Maybe a window with drapes or curtains. If the drapes or curtains are open, it’s daytime. Off in a corner somewhere, just tossed there, is a child’s rag doll and a ball. Just a reminder and we’ll come back to this later in the script, that Rose has become a mother.

Caption 1: Rose’s troubles started a few years later.  Anemia. Abscessed gums, teeth falling out. Nose bleeds. Bones snapping like celery. Both ankles. Three fingers. One she broke just dialing the telephone. Then her jawbone rotted out…

Caption 2: In 1925, when Rose was 25 (and looked 60), she had a visit from Agnes. They hadn’t been in touch for several years.

Rose 1: It’s so kind of you to visit your sick friend—especially when you seem so unwell yourself!

Agnes: Unwell!  I’ve been poisoned—same as you! Same as twenty other girls that we worked with, Rosie. That radium dust we breathed is stuck to our bones! It’s killing us!

Rose 2: But they said it was safe!

 

PANEL NINE

Description: The radium company’s suave and unruffled chief legal officer, SLAUGHTER “SLY” AMBOY, ESQ., is addressing assorted members of the press from an unmiked (this would be too early for that) podium. The reporters are all male, are all jotting on note pads, are all wearing hats; a “PRESS” card is tucked into a few hatbands. The “Lux Radium Company” logo hangs on the front of the podium.

Caption 1: “They.”

Caption 2: The Lux Radium Company. Owned by assorted fat cats, but represented by their public face and chief legal counsel, Slaughter “Sly” Amboy, Esq.

Sly 1: And we still say that radium is safe. A boon to mankind! Today it lights up our watches, tomorrow it may cure every disease known to mankind!

Sly 2: Those women? I feel sorry for them and their wretched lives—but most doctors, I think, would put the blame for their travails squarely on syphilis and not, gentlemen, on phosphorescent paint!

Sly 3: Their lawsuit is groundless.

 

PANEL TEN

Description:  A “strategy session” in Rose and Andy’s kitchen, a modest place; lower-middle class. Maybe a four burner cast iron stove, a sink and a dry sink, pantry shelves with flour, sugar, cans of soup. Around the kitchen table sit Rose, Andy, and the Radium Girls’ “Eccentric Lawyer,” a Real Albert Finney/Paul Newman Flawed-Man Type named TERRY DWYER. He has legal documents, some flat, some tubed, scattered in front of him. Also in front of him, but to one side, is a highball glass, half filled. He’s gesturing as if making a point. Rose looks sicker, smaller, shrunken; she’s in a wooden wheelchair parked at the table. But her face is set and determined. Weak squiggles of radiation come off her body here and there. Andy is sitting across from Dwyer with two dress-wearing small daughters—2 and 4, 3 and 5, whatever—planted on his lap.

Note: For the panel’s composition, the dialog reads: Dwyer, Andy, Rose.

Caption 1: “Their lawsuit”? Rose’s idea! Rising in anger from her sickbed, she’d rallied her dying former co-workers and together they’d recruited the best lawyer they could find.  But not the best lawyer there was.

Caption 2: Terry Dwyer. Charismatic/irascible/demon-plagued.

Caption 3: But committed.

Terry Dwyer: “Sly” Amboy is good in court—and he’s twenty times smarter than I am. But how’s he gonna say his company didn’t know radium was deadly when all their lab guys wore gloves and masks and used tongs!

Andy: You know they’ll just drag this out till Rose and the other girls are all—until we’re all bankrupt! Think of our daughters, Rose!

Rose: I’ve got to see this through. If not to the end, then—at least for as long as I’ve got left.

 

PANEL ELEVEN

Description: A packed courtroom. The Judge on his high bench is peering over to see Rose, sitting up in a hospital bed (placed on the floor in front of the jury box). With a long-handled paintbrush and the tip of her tongue she is demonstrating for the jurors (possibly in the panel, but not necessary; if they are shown, they’re all male) how she and the other girls used to get a very fine point back in the dial-painting factory. A very few radiation squiggles come off her body now. Hardly any. She looks very sick and weak.

Terry Dwyer is standing beside Rose’s bed, having asked the question that prompted her demonstration. He’s gesturing lavishly, making a major point. If there’s room, Sly Amboy could be shouting from the defendant’s table, objecting, or we could see loyal husband Andy in the first row of the courtroom behind the slatted railing. But only if there’s room

Caption 1: The Radium Girls finally had their day in court! Sick and weak, Rose was carried into on a stretcher and testified from a hospital bed.

Terry Dwyer: Day in and day out, gentleman of the jury, these poor girls were told to put poison in their mouths–as part of the job! And the company knew it was poison! But what did they care—there were profits to be made!

Caption 1: The verdict was…disappointing. The company was instructed to pay a portion of the Radium Girls’ medical bills…for a period of two years…but it was not found to be legally at fault. Forever after, however, radium was recognized for the dangerous thing it is…

Caption 2: Terry Dwyer became a better man. But more cynical. Less drinking, fewer demons.

Caption 3: Slaughter “Sly” Amboy became state Attorney General. Then Governor. Then Senator.

Caption 4: None of the Radium Girls lived beyond the age of 30. Their graves will be radioactive for the next 500 years.

 

PANEL TWELVE

Description: A callback of Panel Six: young Rose and Andy dancing at the Christmas Ball, Rose ecstatic as she glows radiantly in the darkened ballroom. This should be a larger image of them than the one back in Panel Six, with only a suggestion of the applauding onlookers. The dialog/caption sequence should bring the reader’s eye down logically to the Inset in the lower right-hand corner of the panel.

Note: The dialog sequence can be encapsulated in balloons without pointers or in ruled rectangles/boxes, but either way, each exchange of the dialog should be put in quotation marks.  The dialog for the inset image of the Cigar-Chomping Comic-Strip-Movie-Mogul should be in a balloon with a pointer, and have no quotation marks.

Dialog 1: “Rose died at home surrounded by her loving husband and daughters. But then, like, we end by going back to that triumphant night at the Christmas Ball—when she was dancing and she was radiant.”

Dialog 2: “Couple questions. First question. Any of this shit true?”

Dialog 3: “Some of it. A lot of it, actually. But so what do you think? You think–?”

Dialog 4:Second question. What are you, a fucking Communist?”

Dialog 5: “Whaddya mean?  It’s a good story, it’s great drama. It’s a tearjerker.”

Inset: Inside the oval is the quintessential Cigar-Chomping Comic-Strip-Movie-Mogul; he’s cranky and barking somebody’s head off, as usual.

Movie Mogul: You had me right up through when she put on that radioactive makeup.  I thought she was gonna get superpowers. Ever think of doing that? Or, like, her touch becomes deadly? Or her kiss! Her kiss kills!

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So that was the first draft. James’ reaction/response: “What a wonderful story, Tom! Well, the story is tragic but you tell it wonderfully. This is like a master class in story structure. Given the number of captions and amount of dialogue, though, it’s going to be hard to get it to work in this highly restrictive 12 panel format. To fit all the text in each panel the font would have to be way too small to be a comfortable online read and the images would be mostly covered up. Should we try to put it in the comics grinder at this end, and see if we can boil it down to 12 panels?”

Naturally, I told James to go ahead and put it through that comics grinder—I’ve never been averse to being edited, never, and besides, my work was going to be edited by one of the truly great cartoonists working today. A few more days passed, and I received the following note from James:

“Passed Radiant through the 12 panel grinder. What I’m finding as I’ve now edited a few of these things is that it is much more a story outline exercise than anything else. Images that rely on small telling details in order for the story to make sense just don’t work for this format. And your meta-ending (which was great) had to go for the story to have the space to land.”

Below you’ll find the edited final script that was then sent off to Melanie Gillman, and her transformation of the script into the gorgeously drawn (in colored pencils)  comic strip that went up on Slate.com on October 21, 2013.  (I highly recommend you check out her ongoing webcomic, “As the Crow Flies,” which can be found at http://www.melaniegillman.com/)

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PANEL ONE

Caption: During World War I, glow-in-the-dark wristwatches were provided to American troops fighting in Europe. The dials were painted with radium-laced paint by teenage girls. The work was perfectly safe. Or at least that’s what they thought in 1917.

Both small hands of a teenage girl: the right holds a long-handled artist’s brush, the point shaped very fine. The left holds a round cardboard wristwatch-dial face. Only a few of the numerals (12, 1, 2) have been finically painted on the watch-dial, the rest of the dial is blank; the tip of the brush has just finished daubing on the numeral “2.” The tip of the brush and the painted-on numerals radiate twinkles. (If there’s room, and the cartoonist is so inclined, the scene might also indicate the surface of a work table and a shallow saucer of paint; the radium-laced paint in the saucer would also throw off some sparkles or scintillas.)  

Dialog off (Agnes): Your guy still coming home for Christmas?

 

PANEL TWO

Caption: The girls were instructed to get a nice firm point on the paintbrush by rolling it across their tongues.

The dial painting studio. Tall multi-pane window. There is a long table/workbench with four teenage girls (16-20) sitting along one side of it on high stools. Two of the girls, seated on side-by-side stools, have turned to one another; they’re talking. The dark haired pretty girl is ROSE. The mousy blonde is AGNES.  

To the right of them, another girl is bent over a dial, working; the last girl in the row is touching the point of her brush to the tip of her tongue to make a fine point. The DEPT. SUPERVISOR, a stocky woman in a white lab coat, stands alongside the last girl, instructing her, but looking over to Rose. A subtle twinkling glow emanates from everything, objects and people alike.  

Rose: Yes—and I’m pretty sure there’s something he wants to ask me.

Supervisor: Rose! Mind on your work, my girl!

 

PANEL THREE

Caption: The dial painters ingested so much radium dust on the job they all began to glow in the dark themselves…

Outdoors, overhead shot. An L-shaped early-20th-century 2-story brick factory building; tall many-paned windows. If it can be fitted naturally: on the roof, either completely or in partial, is a tall, braced illuminated sign: “Lux Radium Company.” Night.  A moon overhead.  Early winter scene. It’s dark, and the dial painters are all leaving work together, in clumps and in pairs, etc., exiting from a couple of doors; they’re tiny from our vantage and they’re all glowing brightly in the pitch black. Cumulatively, they light up the courtyard in front of them. This should look very odd, be unsettling, but magical too. To give the image contrast, some non-dial-painting male workers might be seen crossing the courtyard as well, completely in silhouette.

 The dialog pointers can point anywhere, really, into the crowd of girls; if there are two girls walking distinctly together, the pointers could go to them.

Girl in the crowd/Agnes: Do you think he’ll want to get married before he ships off to France?

Other Girl in the crowd/Rose: Anything’s possible, Agnes—but one step at a time!

Girl in the crowd/Agnes: Oh Rosie, I’m so excited for you!

 

PANEL FOUR

Caption: Rose Gray, 18, wanted to look especially…alluring for her beau at the Christmas Ball, so she sneaked a little dial paint home and added it to her cosmetics. This was an extra-special occasion and the factory had plenty to spare!

Rose, in her lower-middle-class bedroom at home. She’s dressed in a 1917-appropriate slip, and she’s sitting or standing at a large dresser or table mirror, applying makeup, except that she’s using a dial-painting brush and she’s drawing a line with it across the top of one eyelid. And she’s not using make-up, she’s using radium paint (there’s saucer of paint that she sneaked out of work on the dresser/table); already she’s done her lips and they’re glowing brightly. Also, her fingernails. Her hair, too, is gently sparkling/sparking. 

Dialog off (Rose’s Mother): Rose! Honey, Andy’s waiting!

Rose: Coming, Ma!

 

PANEL FIVE

Caption: And that night Rose Gray looked most alluring. She looked—radiant!

In the narrow hallway of a small urban row house, looking up the shabby-ish stairs to Rose who is assuming a glamorous pose at the top. At the foot of the stairs, in the foreground, are ROSE’S MOTHER and ANDY. Andy is wearing a U.S. Army private’s/infantryman’s uniform, circa 1917. Maybe there’s a framed cheap sentimental picture on the wall along the staircase. But while the premises are poor-genteel, the image is Gone With the Wind dramatic: Andy and Rose’s Mother look amazed and delighted gazing open-mouthed up at Grace wearing a nice, but nothing spectacular, winter-party dress. What makes Rose look remarkable is that’s she’s beaming light like some medieval saint or glamorously backlit movie star.

Exclamation points over ANDY and MOTHER’s heads.

 

PANEL SIX

Caption: When the lights were turned off for the last dance, there was a collective gasp—then ecstatic applause for Rose Gray the Radium Girl! That night, Andy proposed. And Rose accepted.

A Christmas ball, circa 1915-20; not country-club swank, more a community center type of affair. Young working-class men and women on a dance floor, seasonal decorations on the walls, perhaps a bandstand (with orchestra) indicated. The couples are surrounding Rose and Andy, giving them a wide berth. The lights have been turned off for the last dance, but Rose is glowing in Andy’s arms (they’re dancing), and the men and women standing around them are all applauding, some illuminated by Rose’s light, others in silhouette. Rose looks happy, Andy is in awe of his uncanny girlfriend.

 

PANEL SEVEN

Caption: Andy married Rose the following summer. She quit her job at the radium company, moved to another city, and started a family.

Rose and Andy going to church with a little girl. Another kid in the strollerRose is pushing.

 

PANEL EIGHT

Caption: By 1925, at age 26, Rose had become very ill.  Anemia. Teeth falling out. Nose bleeds. Bones snapping like celery. She broke a finger just dialing the telephone. Then her jawbone rotted out…

Rose’s married bedroom. She’s sitting propped up against several pillows in the iron bedstead. Beside the bed is a night table with a small lamp and a large collection of pill bottles, a water glass, a spoon. Rose’s friend from the radium company, Agnes, is sitting on a straight-back chair at bedside. The two women are engaged in an intense conversation; both of them have aged dramatically and both look haggard and ill; Agnes’ cane is on the floor alongside of her chair, or else it’s hooked over the chair back. Rose is in her nightgown and on one side of her face, her jawline is thickly bandaged. Her hair is ratty, turning gray. Both women emanate a few weak radiation lines from their heads or bodies. Maybe a window with drapes or curtains. If the drapes or curtains are open, it’s daytime. 

Rose: Agnes, it’s so kind of you to visit your sick friend, after all this years!

Agnes: Sick!  You’ve been poisoned, Rosie—same as me! Same as twenty other girls that we worked with. That radium dust we breathed is stuck to our bones! It’s killing us!

 

PANEL NINE

Caption: The lawsuit was Rose’s idea! Rising in anger from their sickbeds, she and her former co-workers had recruited the best lawyer they could find: Terry Dwyer.

A “strategy session” in Rose and Andy’s kitchen, a modest place; lower-middle class. Maybe a four burner cast iron stove, a sink and a dry sink, pantry shelves with flour, sugar, cans of soup. At the left of the panel, the Radium Girls’ “Eccentric Lawyer,” TERRY DWYER, a Real Albert Finney/Paul Newman Flawed-Man Type, sits at the kitchen table. He has legal documents, some flat, some tubed, scattered in front of him. Also in front of him, but to one side, is a highball glass, half filled. He’s gesturing as if making a point. Andy is sitting in the center of the panel with two dress-wearing small daughters—2 and 4, 3 and 5, whatever—planted on his lap. Rose, at the right, looks sicker, smaller, shrunken; she’s in a wooden wheelchair parked at the table. But her face is set and determined. Weak squiggles of radiation come off her body here and there.  

Terry Dwyer: “How can the company say it didn’t know radium was deadly when all their lab guys wore gloves and masks and used tongs!”

Andy: You know they’ll just drag this out till Rose…what time you have left, spend with your daughters…”

Rose: I’ve got to see this through. If not to the end, then—at least for as long as I’ve got left.

 

PANEL TEN

Caption: The Lux Radium Company was owned by assorted fat cats, but was represented by a single public face: chief legal counsel, Slaughter “Sly” Amboy, Esq.

The radium company’s suave and unruffled chief legal officer, SLAUGHTER “SLY” AMBOY, ESQ., is addressing assorted members of the press from an unmiked (this would be too early for that) podium. The reporters are all male, are all jotting on note pads, are all wearing hats; a “PRESS” card is tucked into a few hatbands. The “Lux Radium Company” logo hangs on the front of the podium.

Sly 1:  Radium is a boon to mankind! Today it lights up our watches, tomorrow it will cure every disease known to mankind!

Sly 2: These woman suffer from syphilis, gentlemen, not phosphorescent paint! Their lawsuit is groundless.

 

PANEL ELEVEN (This panel will have a second caption at the bottom of the image)

Caption 1: The Radium Girls finally had her day in court!

A packed courtroom. The Judge on his high bench is peering over to see Rose, sitting up in a hospital bed (placed on the floor in front of the jury box). With a long-handled paintbrush and the tip of her tongue she is demonstrating for the jurors (possibly in the panel, but not necessary; if they are shown, they’re all male) how she and the other girls used to get a very fine point back in the dial-painting factory. A very few radiation squiggles come off her body now. Hardly any. She looks very sick and weak.

Terry Dwyer is standing beside Rose’s bed, having asked the question that prompted her demonstration. He’s gesturing lavishly, making a major point. If there’s room, Sly Amboy (at the defendant’s table) or loyal husband Andy (in the first row of the courtroom) could be drawn in the background.

Terry Dwyer: Day in and day out, gentleman of the jury, these poor girls were told to put poison in their mouths–as part of the job! The company knew it was poison! But what did they care—there were profits to be made!

 

PANEL TWELVE

Caption 1: The verdict was disappointing. The company had to pay a portion of the Radium Girls’ medical bills…for a period of two years…but it was not found to be legally at fault. None of the Radium Girls lived beyond the age of 30. Though their graves will be radioactive for the next 500 years, through their sacrafice radium was finally recognized for the dangerous thing it is.

Radium Girls’ glowing grave.